For example, in the book There's a Boy in the Girls' Bathroom, Louis Sachar describes Bradley Chalkers, the misunderstood main character, in a way that tells you how odd Bradley is. Here is a description of Bradley from the beginning of the story, when he first meets Jeff: "[Bradley] smiled a strange smile. He stretched his mouth so wide, it was hard to tell whether it was a smile or a frown. He stared at Jeff with bulging eyes as Jeff awkwardly sat down next to him. Jeff smiled back at him so he looked away."
My Explanation: From this description, you can see that people don't really understand Bradley, nor does Bradley understand them. His smile is so strange that people can't tell if he is happy or sad. Bradley also stares at people with bulging eyes. This may make his classmates feel awkward around him. He also doesn't know how to respond appropriately to his classmate's smile -instead of smiling back, he turns away. I like how the author used words like "strange," "bulging," and "awkwardly" to describe Bradley and how he makes people feel.
See how I explained what the description said? Now it's your turn to find and analyze a description.
This Week's Prompt:
Look through your independent reading for a great description of a setting, a character, or an action.
- Tell us where the description occurred in your story.
- Quote the text accurately, as I did above for "There's a Boy in the Girls' Bathroom."
- Then explain what the description means clearly and precisely, like I did above.
- Then say what you like about the description.
I look forward to reading your favorite descriptions and hearing your explanations of them!